PSYCHIC PRIVATE EYE V0.77 BY SANJAFETH

A first-person account of a (male) Private Eye who gradually learns how to 'ride' in other creatures' minds, (see through their eyes, experience what they experience etc.) This opens a fair range of possibilities, and I have tried to leave the game as open as possible so players can explore the aspects of the game that interest them most.

This is my first attempt at game making, so I have had to learn Twine, a little HTML, picture and GIF creation and editing from scratch, so I am not confident I have written (the code) as efficiently as I could have (widgets still challenge me). I am not looking for highly technical critique of my programming at this stage. Some pointers? Sure. But I am more interested in how the game feels, whether I have the balance right etc.

The main things I am looking for in feedback are

Your opinion on whether the first person perspective works, both visually and in the text.

There are a few variables that the player has to balance to advance through the story. There may be more than one way to move the variables one way or the other.

UPDATE 0.72
I have reinstated the 'Back' function while the game is in Beta, reduced the chance of encountering a mugger, and increased the chance of surviving the mugger, I have provided additional save slots

As I said, it is still pretty rough around the edges, and the writing is still very patchy, but feel free to have a play around and give me some constructive comments/criticisms.